Greetings.
Below you will find two items:
1. Packet #3 assignment, due Monday, Feb. 18
2. Copy of handout distributed on Wed. Feb. 13 in class (editing guidelines)
Packet #3 Assignment
This packet consists of one TED Talk video. Approximate running time is 23 minutes.
"Philip Zimbardo/The Psychology of Evil"
http://www.ted.com/talks/philip_zimbardo_on_the_psychology_of_evil.html
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English 20--C. Fraga
Reminders as
you conduct final editing
&
proofreading of out of class essays:
• No ‘you’ and ‘your’ in
formal essay writing.
• No contractions in formal
essay writing.
• More than a few
mechanical and sentence level errors seriously affects the success and
readability of your essay. How to avoid careless errors? PROOFREAD.
• Use interesting and vivid
verbs.
• Learn the difference
between then & than, effect & affect, past & passed.
• Proofread v. carefully
for unacceptable errors.
• SPELLCHECK IS NOT ALWAYS
YOUR FRIEND.
• Avoid commonly used words
such as nice, good, bad, great, wonderful, etc.
• Proofread to catch errors
in tense (tense shifts).
• Read your essay aloud,
slowly, to hear errors often not detected when reading silently. (in
particular, errors in repetitiveness become distracting and irritating quite
quickly)
• Vary sentence beginnings
and sentence lengths.
• Write in present tense as
much as possible. (ex. In this
movie, Ariel, the youngest princess under the sea, was unhappy with her life. Should
be IS unhappy with her life.)
• Do not write in the
manner that you speak.
COMMA SPLICE (the two sentences below have comma splices and
need to be corrected)
·
Home does not
always have to be a place, it can be the memories that a person experiences
that define their childhood.
·
Home for these
men all signifies something different, for the father it’s a place of stability
where he has control.
WORDINESS
On the other hand, we have
songwriters who through their song lyrics showcase battery, fear and strength
within the home.
Better:
On the other hand, some
songwriters showcase battery, fear and strength within the home.
I feel that families have a
great impact on our experiences of home.
Better:
Families have a monumental
impact on our experiences of home.
These country-western songs
about home reveal many of the various aspects of home. These songs reveal that
home is somewhere we feel a sense of belonging, familiarity, and ownership.
Better:
These country-western songs
define home as a place where we feel a sense of belonging, familiarity and
ownership.
About Conclusions:
Do NOT simply re-word
and/or re-phrase what you wrote in your introduction paragraph. It is an insult
to the reader. In a short essay, the reader will not forget the overall premise
of your essay.
You do, of course, want to
refer to your thesis but your remarks should be more complex and qualified than
the version in your introduction. In the end, readers may not agree with you,
but they should know why the issue and your argument matter.
You are addressing the
question, “so what?” What was the purpose for writing the essay? Why is it
significant?
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